Chapter 3 - A Game of Cards
It's funny what you see when you know that someone's going to read your work. After taking another look at the first part of the book today, I see that the "Interlude" chapter will probably need to be cut for three reasons:
I may yet work this in somehow. In particular I want to get across that Isalis is a city of tides (so much so that the whole city is submerged once a year), and to continue to emphasize that it's the Kang that rule things here.
I'm a little embarrassed to be cutting and rearranging this early in the beta, but I suppose it's best I get it over with as soon as possible.
So on to chapter three, wherein we introduce the second main character, a wily Rahastran Cartomancer named Feurid.
- The main character of the chapter doesn't appear again in the novel.
- It's a lead in to chapter 3. But chapter 3 is a flashback, and for various reasons, a multi-chapter flashback seems problematic to me.
- Who ever heard of having an "Interlude" when you're only one chapter into the novel?
I may yet work this in somehow. In particular I want to get across that Isalis is a city of tides (so much so that the whole city is submerged once a year), and to continue to emphasize that it's the Kang that rule things here.
I'm a little embarrassed to be cutting and rearranging this early in the beta, but I suppose it's best I get it over with as soon as possible.
So on to chapter three, wherein we introduce the second main character, a wily Rahastran Cartomancer named Feurid.
"After all, I've never lost a finger playing cards."
posted by Unknown - 9:48 PM
2 Comments:
My advice would be to lose the first paragraph and go straight into the game of cards with Feurid. Then, toward the end, have a brief (but not too obvious) description of the swordsman linking to Za'dar. With the interlude chucked aside, I think you can do this. Otherwise, it would be laborious to go to three different points of view so quickly.
That's a good comment. I've never been so fond of that first paragraph anyway.
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